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No Easy Fix

While the Marine moved to sit on our opponent, he told me to keep the poster on his face while attempting to grab his hands.
This is a horrible sentence. There are three people being referred to: the narrator, the Marine, and the opponent. Who is exactly doing what in the latter part of the sentence is not clear. The sentence needs to be fixed.

What I want to stress here is that there is no easy fix. Filling the sentence with Marine, me, and opponent (or other such references) would actually make the sentence tedious. There is no proper solution except to completely rewrite. Many people who take up writing however do not want to go through the work. Sorry, but if you really want to be a good writer, you have to take on the labor of writing.


The Marine sat on our opponent and sought to grab his hands while telling me to keep the poster on his face.
Not only is this sentence more clear, but it is tighter. A great improvement for a little bit of work. Completely worth it.

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PostSubject: Metaphor and Simile Exercise   September 5th 2008, 8:02 pm

Poetry has a special language of its own. This is referred to as poetic devices or figures of speech, or figurative language. One way to help your reader understand your poem is through the use of comparison of objects. In poetry, the most common devices used for comparison are similes and metaphors.

A simile is a figure of speech in which one object is compared to another unlike object by using the words "like" or "as." An Example of this would be:"I wandered lonely as a cloud" ~ William Wordsworth

A metaphor draws a comparison without the use of "like" or "as" and states that one thing is another. An Example of this would be: "My love is a red rose" "Juliet is the sun." ~William Shakespeare

When using metaphors and similes, it is important to try to make them as original as possible. For example, comparing love to a rose is one of the most overused comparisons in poetry. If your comparisons and similes are fresh and original, your poetry will also be fresh and original.

Why not try and write a short poem using a metaphor or simile or both.

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